I know this is shit but sometimes shit is better than nothing at all...or is it the other way around?
Why can’t you see I’m the one you want?
You chase all these pretty boys
Politicians with empty promises
Cause friends aren’t lovers.
But if you could see the look in my eyes;
you'd think differently.
I'm just the shoulder to cry on
when they break your heart,
but I guess that’s the roll I chose to play.
And all these cold nights
I lay in my empty bed,
I dream of your smile
and every night I ask the stars to change my roll.
But maybe if I broke your heart
you'd like me more,
‘cause that seems to be the latest trend.
I'm sorry I have a heart
I'm sorry you're not a whore
but one day,
(a day too late)
you'll wake up in the middle of the night
(just like the rest)
and you'll realize,
you lost the one thing you always wanted.
So for now, even if it’s just for the night
know I'm willing and waiting,
dreaming of your smile and waiting
for your call;
waiting for the day you wake up and realize…
(how much you love me)
Tell cupid to aim steady and true
cause after this…
(I can't take much more)
after enough nights I'll be through;
move one to someone new,
…Someone that isn't you.
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Same girl?
Part #2 (read second)
Now in lines 25-36 you take on an interesting twist for the end of this poem. You suddenly become nonchalant about getting the girl and leave it entirely up to her to make things happen. Throughout the whole poem you voice this as if you are talking directly to her, (which really paints an awesome vision for how this could be played out). With that being said you “tell” her in lines five and six that if she could just see the way you look at her she’d know what your heart holds for her and when we consider all of these aspects and piece them together we are taken to a climax so romantic, so dramatic that this masterpiece has but one devastatingly true flaw – you force your entire future with this woman to rely on a single look. As we quickly spiral down from our high we slump into the oppressing reality that the only thing keeping this man from true love is his insecurity while love is about freedom. Now we’re left to ponder if in fact the author is worthy enough to have this woman if he’s so cowardly he let’s pretty boys and politicians stop him from fighting for a woman he so obviously desires. You see, as most readers have likely loved and been loved they will know it is always better to at least try and fail then to completely give up and live not knowing. You definitely get the feel that this poem was written with no restraints, it’s all heart and emotion, and because of its rawness and ease it makes for one hell of a masterpiece. My accolades to you, although now I think of you as a coward.
Part #1 (read first)
I know I already commented on this one but because your email has me feeling particularly critical today I thought I’d elaborate. You told me in your email that there is one woman who does not know how you feel about her because of the situation. Due to the content of this poem and its recent date I’d have half a mind to think they may be one in the same. In line four you make a reference that gives away she’s your friend. So now we can eliminate all of the “love at a distance” scenarios, (including stalking, which is reassuring), and safely assume she is someone you know well and she knows you. It’s common knowledge that friends spend time together, they go out to movies and eateries and of course friends are usually the foundation of all our fondest, wildest memories. So we can assume you spend time with this woman. Lines seven and eight suggest that you’re definitely close if she feels comfortable enough to come to you when she’s heart broken and vulnerable. Line nine confirms what you’ve already told me, she doesn’t know how you feel. Lines 13-15 reveals that you really do want to express your feelings to this woman and be a more active, intimate piece in her life. Lines 19-23 take on a strong lead for a dramatic approach to line 24, (which appropriately ends with a period…all apart of good structure so the reader realizes the intensity and drama in that line and the lines leading up to it). Focusing back on line 24, which either reveals you have a huge ego or that because she is your close friend, as we have presumed from previous lines, that you would know what kind of man her heart longs for and you feel you can fit that mold. But as we learned from line nine you chose to keep your heart a secret from her so perhaps although you feel you can be what she desires you are held back by insecurity and inadequate thoughts and feelings because as you said in lin
This is the complete last sentence of part #1.
But as we learned from line nine you chose to keep your heart a secret from her so perhaps although you feel you can be what she desires you are held back by insecurity and inadequate thoughts and feelings because as you said in lines two and three she chases pretty boys and politicians.
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