Monday, November 12, 2007

Hourglass

In the silence of our surrender

we’d become fragmented shells

of our former selves,

responding only to physical impulses.

We were lost to the world

wandering the dark abyss

that is our lives,

looking for that blinding light,

that white flash of hope

that we once shared.

But this is the life we’ve been given

despite all our parents prayers.

And as this moment passes to obscurity,

a passage in time that no one will remember

we’re dragged across existence

like a lazy southern drawl

and covered with the slurred comfort of eternity.

We have become footnotes

in the history of the world.

Once day these shackles of sin and sorrow

will be broken.

The key kept inside a beating heart,

my siren of freedom that wanders this dirty valley.

1 comment:

Anonymous said...

Of all your poems that I have read so far, this one has the most fitting title.  “Hourglass” is definitely an attention grabber and intrigued me to read further without skimming some lines below first.  Sometimes your titles seem a bit off-beat with the actual content of the poem.  It might help to keep in mind that the title isn’t just a bunch of miscellaneous words you pull out of thin air.  The title is the introduction to the rest of the poem.  It’s what invites the reader to come read more.  I was a bit skeptical that, like the other poems I’ve read, this title would also not fit but I was pleasantly surprised how nicely it related.  Well done.  

As for the content itself, I love the imagery.  You used a lot of commonly known physical things like dark abyss, blinding light, Southern drawl, shackles, etc and related them to a more emotional state thus creating a very unique metaphor.